https://www.gloriayin.com/better-friends-2/ Wed, 15 Aug 2012 20:02:45 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=7.0 https://www.gloriayin.com/better-friends-2/#comment-282 Wed, 15 Aug 2012 20:02:45 +0000 http://www.gloriayin.com/?p=595#comment-282 I like how your story’s developing Gloria. But… it could use more adventure. Also, try using the indent trick from before. It will make it seem more organized.
I have an idea: (you don’t even have to look at it if you don’t want to)
It was almost Aria’s birthday. Chelsea and Jared were quite puzzled on what they should give her, so they decided to ask her.
“What would you you like to have for your birthday?” Chelsea asked her one day. Aria didn’t think twice about replying.
“Barbies!” she exclaimed giddily, waving her beloved Fashionista Barbie in the air. Chelsea smiled and walked away to tell Jared.
CONTINUED… by you.
PS: my suggestion is sorta like an intro. It’s not like you have to use it or anything. Just an idea. 😀
– Carol Li

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